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Draken Stone axe          Since: 08-26-04 From: Wouldnt you like to know Since last post: 6274 days Last activity: 6257 days |
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| I walk in to a modern city looking for some one worthy enough to call enemy a sniper rifle on my back I call it Ramonth after a dragon I read about in a book. Then there’s the shot gun hanging like a sword on my thigh I call it Mostevilone after my old faithful nightmare in a game I used to play. Its been so long I cant remember what game was called. That’s not important what is important is my opponent I really need to find some one to kill.
I walk into a bar I know it sounds like and old joke but trust me it ain’t. It’s also Monday morning I may have forgotten to mention that I sometimes for get while I’m telling stories any ways ill continue. oh right i also have an AK it new i dont have a name for it yet. I look around there’s the bartender and the cigarette machine over in the corner I take out my shotgun and with a loud bang I blow the brains out of the bartender. I cock the gun and do the same to the cigarette machine, I never really thought cigarettes were sanitary. I put my gun away and walk out side where crowds of people are starring at me I cant figure out why, but I continue walking anyways down the side walk. It’s a beautiful day right now the birds are singing the grass is green and the children are playing. A pack of children are running along on their way to school and just so happen to walk by me I quickly turn around and snap and rip one of the children’s heads clean off I take out my shot gun and shoot the bloody head and the bloody body. I continue walking the people are staring at me a lot have stared running and for good reason its almost nine they should be a t their jobs now. even more, I put my shotgun away and wipe of m wet hands in the grass. And I continue walking through the now empty streets. By now im getting thursty and feel like getting a glass of OJ i walk in to a mcdonalds i take out my AK and shoot every one not missing a single person and only usig on bullet per head i jump over the counter and take a few cups and a few biscuits. so what do you think so far ? |
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The Accidental Protege Iggy Koopa I\"m your accidental protege... The gift, the blood, the thrownaway...\" Since: 03-08-05 From: Marching on the city of Southern Cross Since last post: 1165 days Last activity: 1165 days |
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| This lacks focus, direction and stability. The grammar, spelling and usage are poor, at best, not to mention the punctuation (or lack thereof). I can't say that I'd want to read more of it, I'm sorry to say.
Not only that, but I believe a trip to the psychiatrist is in order, as well. (Last edited by Scheissenkopf on 12-27-05 10:48 PM) |
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AlpoRaggins Troubadour Not so much dead. Since: 12-11-04 From: Someday, Somewhere, Over the Rainbow Since last post: 6612 days Last activity: 6501 days |
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| The parts after the... more gruesome descriptions... are kind of funny. I think you wanted it to be like that...?
As for the rest... its sort of troubling to be honest... But I'm cool with it if you... you know, don't actually make this story into anything real. |
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Draken Stone axe Since: 08-26-04 From: Wouldnt you like to know Since last post: 6274 days Last activity: 6257 days |
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| im still writing more in word but yes im going forgruesome im trying a steven king aproach and not holding any thing back and youll notice more things as it goes along and also its supposed to be incorrect grammar and youll see that later too
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The Accidental Protege Iggy Koopa I\"m your accidental protege... The gift, the blood, the thrownaway...\" Since: 03-08-05 From: Marching on the city of Southern Cross Since last post: 1165 days Last activity: 1165 days |
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| Keep this on Wordpad, or whatever program you use that apparently doesn't have spellcheck. This is just too... Agh. Words can't describe the animosity I'm feeling towards this piece. It's more or less an embarressment to the Story Realm. |
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